narrative essay - how to revise for a stronger narrative

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Want to make your Narrative Essay stronger? The revision tips here will help with global and local revision of the narrative essay.

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Revising the Narrative Essay:

1 Revising the Narrative Essay What’s your next move?

2 Types of Revision:

2 Types of Revision Global Revision Local Revision

2 Types of Revision:

2 Types of Revision Global Revision = changing the structure, format, and content of the essay. ( Major changes )

2 Types of Revision:

2 Types of Revision Local Revision = changing specific words, correcting errors, making small changes .

Global Revision :

Global Revision An example of Global Revision on a house would be a complete remodeling. The remodeled house is very different from the original.

Local Revision:

Local Revision An example of Local Revision on a house would be a paint job and trim accents. The repainted house is improved, but still similar to the original.

2 Types of Revision:

2 Types of Revision Your revised Narrative should present both GLOBAL and LOCAL Revision.

Global Revision :

Global Revision Narrative Essay

Global Revision :

Global Revision First, consider the 2 main requirements of the Narrative Essay: Tell a story Make a point

1. Tell a Story:

1. Tell a Story

Global Revision :

Global Revision Tell a story: Short time period (the shorter the better— 30-60 minutes is great! If you are covering years in your Narrative, you need to narrow your focus. )

Global Revision :

Global Revision Tell a story: 1 st Person – Is the story told from your point of view, using “I”?

Global Revision :

Global Revision Tell a story: Provide the 5 W’s: Who was involved? What happened? When did this occur? Where did the incident happen? Why did it happen?

Global Revision :

Global Revision Tell a story: ONE incident: is the story focused upon ONE event?

2. Make a Point:

2. Make a Point

Global Revision :

Global Revision Make a Point Thesis: Mention the incident State the impact Use 1 st person “I”

Global Revision :

Global Revision Make a Point Thesis : Mention the incident After my accident …

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Global Revision Make a Point Thesis : State the impact …I realized that I was vulnerable and less in control than I originally thought.

Global Revision :

Global Revision Make a Point Thesis : Use 1 st person “I” After my accident, I realized that I was vulnerable and less in control than I originally thought.

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Global Revision Make a Point Thesis : Mention the incident Seeing my grandfather lie…

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Global Revision Make a Point Thesis : State the impact …taught me that I could not trust everyone like I did before.

Global Revision :

Global Revision Make a Point Thesis : Use 1 st person “I” Seeing my grandfather lie taught me that I could not trust everyone like I did before.

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Global Revision Make a Point Thesis : Mention the incident Traveling to Africa

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Global Revision Make a Point Thesis : State the impact opened my eyes to how spoiled Americans are.

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Global Revision Make a Point Thesis : Use 1 st person “I” Traveling to Africa opened my eyes to how spoiled Americans are.

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Global Revision Make a Point Your thesis should be a statement rather than a question : Yes  Kameelah’s mysterious disinterest in our relationship makes me hesitant about dating anyone. No  Why did Kameelah suddenly lose interest in our relationship?

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Global Revision Make a Point Your thesis should not state the obvious : NO  “Going to Disney World was really fun for me and my family.” (Disney is supposed to be fun…too obvious.)

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Global Revision Make a Point Your thesis should not give advice: NO  “Students who are tempted to plagiarize should consider the long-term consequences of being caught.” (Remember to keep the thesis focused upon you , not the reader or others)

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Global Revision Make a Point Your thesis should not be a cliché: NO  I realized that life is short and I should learn to live each day as if it were my last. What a boring cliché! You can do better than that.

Global Revision:

Global Revision The Narrative thesis can appear at the beginning  Or at the end  Or as the last sentence  Introduction Body Conclusion

Global Revision:

Global Revision Be sure that the story supports/proves the thesis thesis Story paragraphs

Local Revision :

Local Revision Narrative Essay

Local Revision :

Local Revision Local Revision = editing, making minor changes to the surface. Correcting errors Adding/deleting commas Switching words Draft does not change in organization or content.

Local Revision :

Local Revision Print your essay out and put it away for at least an hour .

Local Revision :

Local Revision Starting at the end of your essay, read each sentence from last to first 1. Read the last sentence first 2. Read this sentence second 3. Read this sentence third 4. Read this sentence fourth 5. Read this sentence fifth 6. Read this sentence sixth 7. Read this sentence seventh 8. Read this sentence eighth Etc…

Local Revision :

Local Revision Check for academic writing “Don’ts” Use “Find” (located under “Editing”) to search for “ you ,” “ thing ,” “ get ,” “ got ”

Local Revision :

Local Revision Run spellcheck, but be sure to double check anything you “change”

Local Revision :

Local Revision Look for transitions —be sure your paragraphs connect smoothly Time sequence transitions: after, afterward, at last, before, currently, during, earlier, immediately, later, meanwhile, now, recently, simultaneously, subsequently, then

Local Revision :

Local Revision Check for wordiness: “there are” / “there is” Lots of prepositions (of, to, from, for etc…) Revise wordy sentences to make them more concise

Remember Global + Local Revision :

Remember Global + Local Revision End of presentation.

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