logging in or signing up Show don't tell janphillips Download Post to : URL : Related Presentations : Share Add to Flag Embed Email Send to Blogs and Networks Add to Channel Uploaded from authorPOINT lite Insert YouTube videos in PowerPont slides with aS Desktop Copy embed code: (To copy code, click on the text box) Embed: URL: Thumbnail: WordPress Embed Customize Embed The presentation is successfully added In Your Favorites. Views: 128 Category: Education License: All Rights Reserved Like it (0) Dislike it (0) Added: January 31, 2011 This Presentation is Public Favorites: 0 Presentation Description No description available. Comments Posting comment... Premium member Presentation Transcript Show, Don’t Tell : Show, Don’t Tell Making the reader “see” Illustrate : Illustrate Turn the abstract into the concrete by using anecdotes (short stories), examples, or description. Slide 3: Showing means to “give evidence”; if you say your teacher is unfair, for example, I don’t know exactly what you mean. But if you give me a specific example—“my teacher gives all the boys in the class A’s and all the girls F’s even when they have the same answers”—then I do know just what you mean by “unfair.” Slide 4: If you say “My sister is attractive,” would I be able to picture her? No, but if you describe her button nose, her consilk-soft blonde hair, her twinkling green eyes, and her tinkling laugh, I can begin to both see AND hear her. Slide 5: Think of showing as anything that can be tape-recorded or filmed--in other words, proven by the senses. Be specific : Be specific Avoid generalized language. My mother is nice. My mother is kind. My mother taught me many things. My mother supports me. Telling: The woman was sick. She didn’t look lively at all. She showed symptoms of illness. She clearly was not herself. : Telling: The woman was sick. She didn’t look lively at all. She showed symptoms of illness. She clearly was not herself. Showing: The woman curled up on the bed, unmoving. A sticky film covered her half-closed eyes. Her once shiny brown hair appeared tangled and matted. She breathed with a harsh, rattling sound. Slide 8: Telling The soldier was impressive. Slide 9: Showing: He was a stocky, barrel-chested man in his thirties with thick, muscular forearms, a jagged scar running along his forehead, a Purple Heart and Vietnam Service Ribbon emblazoned on his chest. Slide 10: Telling I was angry. Slide 11: Showing: I clenched my fists and glared at my mother, pressure welling up inside me like a volcano. How dare she tell me how to dress, as though I were a child! Slide 12: Telling Bill caught the ball. Slide 13: Showing: Bill raced to the backfield, turned, leaped; the ball smacked loudly into his glove. Slide 14: Instead of using abstract words like “interesting,” “angry,” “fun,” or “good,” to tell, use concrete and specific words to show. You do not have the permission to view this presentation. In order to view it, please contact the author of the presentation.
Show don't tell janphillips Download Post to : URL : Related Presentations : Share Add to Flag Embed Email Send to Blogs and Networks Add to Channel Uploaded from authorPOINT lite Insert YouTube videos in PowerPont slides with aS Desktop Copy embed code: (To copy code, click on the text box) Embed: URL: Thumbnail: WordPress Embed Customize Embed The presentation is successfully added In Your Favorites. Views: 128 Category: Education License: All Rights Reserved Like it (0) Dislike it (0) Added: January 31, 2011 This Presentation is Public Favorites: 0 Presentation Description No description available. Comments Posting comment... Premium member Presentation Transcript Show, Don’t Tell : Show, Don’t Tell Making the reader “see” Illustrate : Illustrate Turn the abstract into the concrete by using anecdotes (short stories), examples, or description. Slide 3: Showing means to “give evidence”; if you say your teacher is unfair, for example, I don’t know exactly what you mean. But if you give me a specific example—“my teacher gives all the boys in the class A’s and all the girls F’s even when they have the same answers”—then I do know just what you mean by “unfair.” Slide 4: If you say “My sister is attractive,” would I be able to picture her? No, but if you describe her button nose, her consilk-soft blonde hair, her twinkling green eyes, and her tinkling laugh, I can begin to both see AND hear her. Slide 5: Think of showing as anything that can be tape-recorded or filmed--in other words, proven by the senses. Be specific : Be specific Avoid generalized language. My mother is nice. My mother is kind. My mother taught me many things. My mother supports me. Telling: The woman was sick. She didn’t look lively at all. She showed symptoms of illness. She clearly was not herself. : Telling: The woman was sick. She didn’t look lively at all. She showed symptoms of illness. She clearly was not herself. Showing: The woman curled up on the bed, unmoving. A sticky film covered her half-closed eyes. Her once shiny brown hair appeared tangled and matted. She breathed with a harsh, rattling sound. Slide 8: Telling The soldier was impressive. Slide 9: Showing: He was a stocky, barrel-chested man in his thirties with thick, muscular forearms, a jagged scar running along his forehead, a Purple Heart and Vietnam Service Ribbon emblazoned on his chest. Slide 10: Telling I was angry. Slide 11: Showing: I clenched my fists and glared at my mother, pressure welling up inside me like a volcano. How dare she tell me how to dress, as though I were a child! Slide 12: Telling Bill caught the ball. Slide 13: Showing: Bill raced to the backfield, turned, leaped; the ball smacked loudly into his glove. Slide 14: Instead of using abstract words like “interesting,” “angry,” “fun,” or “good,” to tell, use concrete and specific words to show.